In the article "What is Collaborative Learning," by Smith and MacGregor theydefine collaborative learning, and point how it is important to students` learning. They start saying that how this learning is, how it influences the student, how it is diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then the authors talk about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.
All the time the student will be responsible for himself and for another students in his group. He/she The student may resolve the issues not just see the teacher resolving it. "These approaches develop problem-solving abilities, understanding of complex relationships, and decisionmaking in the face of uncertainty." They interact more. And they work accepting differences and diverse opinions. The authors say it is a complex work (what is complex work?) in this way (which way?) because it requires a lot of students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement." But thus it makes students work harder and learn more. They participate in all the process of learning, they see both sides: the student and teacher. Although it is a great opportunity, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, is hard to say they learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged, and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow."
Giselle's Suggestion:
I think you should explain what a collaborative learning is. Is important for those who haven't read the text.
I don't think that your first paragraph is really needed, because is not explaining or transmitting any important information to readers.
I think that the word issue is not the right one to be used there,try problem.
try to connect this sentence:
"These approaches develop problem-solving abilities, understanding of complex relationships, and decision making in the face of uncertainty."to the paragraph,or simply delete it.
in the 3rd paragraph :
this first sentence is not well written. You should rewrite it.
Like: the authors says... it is a complex work in this way because it requires a lot of students:it should be: it is a complex work because it requires from students....and i thint you shoul connect "This is a challenging process, one that requires........to the sentence.
In the 4th paragraph: rethink what you want to say.Although it is a great opportunity...is not the best word to use here.try: Although it is a great way of learning.... ... Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, its still hard to say they are actually learning with this. rethink about this last sentence: Students must be motivated and encouraged, and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow."
I think you shouldn't use THE AUTHOR said this and that, it gives the impression of a review ,not a summary. but that's just My opinion...i don't know if its right.
Agatha - I think Giselle made some very important suggestions and did a very good job of peer-editing your first draft. Try to avoid using words such as "it" and "that" often, and instead ensure the reader will know what you are referring to. Please see my suggestions below. Always make sure that general statements
Second Version
In the article "What is Collaborative Learning" by Smith and MacGregor define collaborative learning as a method of study, in which students primarly work in groups or teams and they teach one another. And itThe article points to how it is important it is forto students learning in this way. It starts saying how this learning is applied, how it influences the student, how it's diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then it talks about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.
All the time the student will be responsible for himself and for another students in his group. He/sheIn collaborative work, the student may work in a team to resolve the a problem or try, not just see the teacher resolving it. TheyStudents interact more and they work throughaccepting differences and diverse opinions.
The text saysit is a complex work because it requires a lot from students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement."ButHowever,thusit makes students work harder and learn more. TheyStudents participate in all the entire process of learning, and they see both sides of the process:as both a student and a teacher. Although it is a great way of learning, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, its still hard to say they are actually learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged to take part and to learn by this method and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow." Final Version In the article "What is Collaborative Learning", Smith and MacGregor define collaborative learning as a method of study, in which students primarly work in groups os teams and teach one another. The article points to how important it is for students learning in this way. It starts saying how this learning is applied, how it influences the student, how it's diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then it talks about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.All the time, the student will be reponsable for himself and for other students in his group. In collaborative work, the student may work in a team to resolve a problem, instead of just listening to the teacher explain the problem. Students interact more and they work through differences and diverse opinions.The text explain that work in this way is complex because it requires a lot from students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement" (pag. 5). However, this process makes students work harder and learn more. Students participate in the entire process of learning, and they see both sides of the process: as both a student and a teacher.Although it is a great way of learning, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" (pag. 8) Even if students follow all of steps to work in group and finish the work, its still difficult to say they are actually learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged to take part and to learn through the method and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow" (pag. 9).
First version
In the article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, start saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in real life, not only in academic life. To students work in group, first of all they have to decide what each one of the group will do and to determine a deadline to not delay. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it.Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face. " A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience." Creating a page in some tool in the internet, like Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs and Wikispaces. They can talk, edit, revise the work simultaneously.In the last step, the presentation, the group may choose a technology for this, and observe the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format."Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improve the quality of group work."
Giselle's suggestion
: In the article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, she starts saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in real life, not only in academic life. To students work in groupTo workin groups, studentsfirst of all they haveneed to decide what each one of the group will do and to determine a deadline to not delay. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it.Subsequently, the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face. " A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience.i think it needs a linking word here" Creating a page in some tool in the internet, like Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs and Wikispaces. They can talk, edit, revise the work simultaneously.In the last step, the presentation, the group may choose a technology for this(for what?), and observe the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format."Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improve the quality of group work."
NICE JOB!!!!
Second Version
The article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, starts saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in realeveryday life and not only in academic life. To working groups, students need to decide what each onemember of the group will do and to determine a deadline to notavoid delays. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it. Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face." A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience." If they create a page in some tool in the internet, using an internet tool such aslike Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs or and Wikispaces, they can talk, edit, and revise the work simultaneously.In the last step (you never indicated that you were discussing steps in the beginning of your summary, you may want to specify that with the other steps you discussed earlier), the group may choose a technology for their presentation, and observebased on the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format." Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improves the quality of group work." I can see an improvement in this summary from your first. You had a good understanding of the material, and just need to work on organizing it. Remember to avoid using "it," "that," and "this" so you do not confuse your reader. Keep working hard! Cynthia Final Version The article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, says how collaborative work can be employed in everyday life and not only in academic life. When working in groups there are three steps to follow: "assessing the project or tasks, using technology to organize the project and using technology to present the project". In the first step, students need to decide what each member of the group will do and determine a deadline to avoid delays. The author states that collaborative technologies can help a group organize and present work when members cannot meet face-to-face. Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they will use to organize and create their project. If a group creates a page, using an internet tool such as Google Docs, Google Talk, blogs or Wikispaces, groups can discuss, edit and revise the work simultaneously. In the last step, the group may choose a technology for their presentation, based on the nature of the project. And if the group project has statistics and many number, the group might consider creating graphs to display in an honest and visually appealing format (pag. 243, 244). Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improves the quality of group work" (pag. 246).
In the article "What is Collaborative Learning," by Smith and MacGregor they define collaborative learning, and point how it is important to students` learning. They start saying that how this learning is, how it influences the student, how it is diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then the authors talk about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.
All the time the student will be responsible for himself and for another students in his group. He/she The student may resolve the issues not just see the teacher resolving it. "These approaches develop problem-solving abilities, understanding of complex relationships, and decisionmaking in the face of uncertainty." They interact more. And they work accepting differences and diverse opinions.
The authors say it is a complex work (what is complex work?) in this way (which way?) because it requires a lot of students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement." But thus it makes students work harder and learn more. They participate in all the process of learning, they see both sides: the student and teacher.
Although it is a great opportunity, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, is hard to say they learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged, and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow."
Giselle's Suggestion:
- I think you should explain what a collaborative learning is. Is important for those who haven't read the text.
- I don't think that your first paragraph is really needed, because is not explaining or transmitting any important information to readers.
- I think that the word issue is not the right one to be used there,try problem.
- try to connect this sentence:
"These approaches develop problem-solving abilities, understanding of complex relationships, and decision making in the face of uncertainty."to the paragraph,or simply delete it.this first sentence is not well written. You should rewrite it.
Like: the authors says...
it is a complex work in this way because it requires a lot of students:it should be:
it is a complex work because it requires from students....and i thint you shoul connect "This is a challenging process, one that requires........to the sentence.
rethink what you want to say.Although it is a great opportunity...is not the best word to use here.try:
Although it is a great way of learning.... ... Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, its still hard to say they are actually learning with this. rethink about this last sentence: Students must be motivated and encouraged, and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow."
Agatha - I think Giselle made some very important suggestions and did a very good job of peer-editing your first draft. Try to avoid using words such as "it" and "that" often, and instead ensure the reader will know what you are referring to. Please see my suggestions below. Always make sure that general statements
Second Version
In the article "What is Collaborative Learning" by Smith and MacGregor define collaborative learning as a method of study, in which students primarly work in groups or teams and they teach one another. And it The article points to how it is important it is for to students learning in this way. It starts saying how this learning is applied, how it influences the student, how it's diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then it talks about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.
All the time the student will be responsible for himself and for another students in his group. He/she In collaborative work, the student may work in a team to resolve the a problem or try, not just see the teacher resolving it. They Students interact more and they work through accepting differences and diverse opinions.
The text says it is a complex work because it requires a lot from students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement." But However, thus it makes students work harder and learn more. They Students participate in all the entire process of learning, and they see both sides of the process: as both a student and a teacher.
Although it is a great way of learning, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" Even if students follow all of steps and finish the work, its still hard to say they are actually learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged to take part and to learn by this method and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow."
Final Version
In the article "What is Collaborative Learning", Smith and MacGregor define collaborative learning as a method of study, in which students primarly work in groups os teams and teach one another. The article points to how important it is for students learning in this way. It starts saying how this learning is applied, how it influences the student, how it's diverse and how the teacher can explore the students. Then it talks about work in group and how it helps the student, involving them with theirselves.All the time, the student will be reponsable for himself and for other students in his group. In collaborative work, the student may work in a team to resolve a problem, instead of just listening to the teacher explain the problem. Students interact more and they work through differences and diverse opinions.The text explain that work in this way is complex because it requires a lot from students: "This is a challenging process, one that requires students to read and listen to fellow students’ writing with insight, and to make useful suggestions for improvement" (pag. 5). However, this process makes students work harder and learn more. Students participate in the entire process of learning, and they see both sides of the process: as both a student and a teacher.Although it is a great way of learning, "how do we ensure students are learning and mastering key skills and ideas in the course, while at the same time addressing all the material of the course?" (pag. 8) Even if students follow all of steps to work in group and finish the work, its still difficult to say they are actually learning with this. Students must be motivated and encouraged to take part and to learn through the method and "everyone is welcome to join, participate and grow" (pag. 9).
First version
In the article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, start saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in real life, not only in academic life. To students work in group, first of all they have to decide what each one of the group will do and to determine a deadline to not delay. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it.Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face. " A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience." Creating a page in some tool in the internet, like Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs and Wikispaces. They can talk, edit, revise the work simultaneously.In the last step, the presentation, the group may choose a technology for this, and observe the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format."Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improve the quality of group work."
Giselle's suggestion
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In the article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, she starts saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in real life, not only in academic life. To students work in group To workin groups, students first of all they have need to decide what each one of the group will do and to determine a deadline to not delay. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it.Subsequently, the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face. " A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience.i think it needs a linking word here" Creating a page in some tool in the internet, like Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs and Wikispaces. They can talk, edit, revise the work simultaneously.In the last step, the presentation, the group may choose a technology for this(for what?), and observe the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format."Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improve the quality of group work."
NICE JOB!!!!
Second Version
The article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, starts saying about collaborative work and how it can be employed in real everyday life and not only in academic life. To working groups, students need to decide what each one member of the group will do and to determine a deadline to not avoid delays. Then they say how collaborative technologies can help in a work group to organize it and then present it. Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they'll use to make it, mainly if they can't meet face to face. " A collaborative technology [...] can help group members organize their contributions, respond to others’ ideas, communicate with members of the group [...] and facilitate a way to present the final group project to an audience." If they create a page in some tool in the internet, using an internet tool such as like Google Docs, GoogleTalk, blogs or and Wikispaces, they can talk, edit, and revise the work simultaneously.In the last step (you never indicated that you were discussing steps in the beginning of your summary, you may want to specify that with the other steps you discussed earlier), the group may choose a technology for their presentation, and observe based on the nature of the project. "If the group project you completed involved many numbers or statistics, you might consider creating graphs and charts to display the statistics in an honest and visually appealing format." Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improves the quality of group work."
I can see an improvement in this summary from your first. You had a good understanding of the material, and just need to work on organizing it. Remember to avoid using "it," "that," and "this" so you do not confuse your reader. Keep working hard! Cynthia
Final Version
The article "Collaborating Online: Digital Strategies for Group Work" by Atkins, says how collaborative work can be employed in everyday life and not only in academic life. When working in groups there are three steps to follow: "assessing the project or tasks, using technology to organize the project and using technology to present the project". In the first step, students need to decide what each member of the group will do and determine a deadline to avoid delays. The author states that collaborative technologies can help a group organize and present work when members cannot meet face-to-face. Subsequently the group may organize the tasks and decide what kind of technology they will use to organize and create their project. If a group creates a page, using an internet tool such as Google Docs, Google Talk, blogs or Wikispaces, groups can discuss, edit and revise the work simultaneously. In the last step, the group may choose a technology for their presentation, based on the nature of the project. And if the group project has statistics and many number, the group might consider creating graphs to display in an honest and visually appealing format (pag. 243, 244). Even though collaborative work can be hard and complex, it "improves the quality of group work" (pag. 246).